This is a story that i wrote based on the continuous question for the PSLE compo this yr. this is a story, never write this for compo unless u wanna get a 0/40..... without the visiting friend bit of coz.......and its supposed to be in present tense......
Final Destination 5??
"Hurry up Jade!! The train has already arrived!" my friend, Roxxi, exclaims.
"Coming," I say.
We run down the escalator and manage to catch the train destined for Harbourfront in time. Since the train is not packed with commuters, both Roxxi and I quickly find ourselves each a seat and settle down in the second last carriage of the train. As we do not have much to talk about, soon, I nod off.......
Suddenly, the train jerks and then stops. The lights flicker on and off. The passengers on board the train stop talking loudly and look around some are cursing and swearing, while others look worried. Although i cannot see Roxxi in this dim light, i can feel her gripping onto her plastic chair tightly. I can feel her tension. I now i am very afraid deep down, but I try to stay calm-telling myself that this is just another ordinary drill.
Minutes later, I am still not convinced even though it is I that is telling myself that it is not real. The train hasn't started moving yet and the commuters are all talking amongst themselves. I turn to look at Roxxi and she looks as frightened as a mouse and she is sweating. She turns to look at me too. She smiles feebly but both of us are way too frightened to say a word to each other. I am sweating now.
All of a sudden, we see some bright orange-yellow light, most likely from another train. Thinking that the train would definitely notice us, the passengers don't really care. However, as it starts moving nearer and nearer to our train, it doesn't stop. If it does not stop, any moment now, it can crash into us. We scream at it to stop, but it doesn't. Like as if it is a dream, that train crashes into us. It goes right into the last carriage of our train before anyone can react. Straight away, all of the passengers get up onto our feet and start running us fast as we can into the middle of the train. Then out of a sudden, our train starts moving forward and out of the tunnel. However, we forget that the train behind us is still moving very fast, smashing right though our train. To our relief, we get out of the tunnel we are in and are out onto open tracks.
The train behind us has stopped. Roxxi heaves a sigh of relief, I go stiff, as little did we realize that all the metal plates of the smashed carriages are flying towards us as we are going at a very high speed. The train is disconnected.
We are in serious danger.
"We gotta jump onto that platform!" Roxxi shouts
.We all look at her as if she belongs in a mental asylum.
The metal plates and strong gusts of wind are making all the passengers screaming. We take cover under the plastic seats, not that it would actually help. A sharp metal plate slashes my hand slightly. I scream in pain.
"Jade!! Oh my God!!" Roxxi shrieks,"Come on, we have to jump!"
By now, we've all started to agree with her. One by one, all the passengers jump off the train-cautiously. After all of us have gotten off the train, the train starts moving at a very, very high speed. All of us women scream, wondering why the driver wont stop.
Almost immediately, the train that once looked new, now shredding. all the metal pieces had fallen apart and now it is flying at us. Like a drama, they fly at everyone, including Roxxi and they are all so sharp. One metal piece flies at me-I dodge. Phew, i think, that was close. We get onto our knees and start to crawl to the entrance in the tunnel since it isn't far. The sharp metal piece hits Roxxi on her back.
"Roxxi!" I cry. i am so tempted to help her, but i know that saving my own life is more important.i carry on, silently bidding Roxxi farewell. Unbelievably, there are more metal pieces, hitting people one by one-it as if it is a dream, a horrific one. Strangely, none of them hit me. Its as if im just too lucky. As I get into the tunnel, i realise I am the only survivor of this disaster. Only, i have totally forgotten about the other train that was behind our train. I am so exhausted that i accidentally fall onto the tracks, thinking that it will be alright. Suddenly, the train, like as if the wheels had been rubbed by vaseline, speeds up to me. I scream and sit up. Im too tired to move i just stay there.....
I jolt.
"Hey, Jade, you ok?? you were screaming just now" Roxxi says,"Is it one of those dreams again?"
I nod.
And then, suddenly, the train jerks and stops. The lights flicker on and off.
You can NEVER escape death..........
Saturday, October 13, 2007
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